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And when the sun sinks, the earth's skin crawls:


I.
I wonder if this awkward creature would notice me the way I notice him.
He's so tragic at his throne
I stare after him longingly.
And yet,
He never realizes that I'm the one
Who forever basks in his brilliant beams.
If only he knew how much brighter he could burn
[with me]
He'd light up the universe.




II.
I heard him speak of thirst, once.
The quenching lust of the stars had run dry.
So that night, I brought along a jar of acid.
(And how it gleamed in his glow).
I handed it to him, wrapped in taffeta ribbons,
screaming
I wish curdling joy
On my gurgling boy


   I love his eyes, now
   Clouded white like milk from a poisoned tree  
   And his throat,
   Swollen and clotted
   And his lips blue as the
   faded heavens
   I try to get him to laugh but
   His body is stuck and
   his bones
   almost fossilized  


And so the poor beast stands paralyzed
While his children rise out of the sea
       enormous wings crackling outwards,
     a new patch of life as
         the soil becomes thick with blood.



III.
When the sun sinks, the earth's skin crawls;
hyper-responsive circuitry
Retrieving, coiling up quickly,
from flowers to the bones of birds-
closing and caving inwards.


A pompous toast to my man in the sky
Drown the last of us but,
You can never give them the thrill
the shriek
the climatic jolt  

that I could.
:iconiyraemm:
There wasn't any musical inspiration for this Pfft! I never write in silence.
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I only divided it into parts because it was easier for me to read, and I wanted to be all hoity-toity like those fancy poets.

Does the sudden change of tenses in II. bother you? I'm uncertain.

I kinda had fun with this one.
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and would like to know how I can improve it.
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Given 2012-10-15
earth circuit by ~IyraEMM ( Featured by ^Beccalicious )
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Mood: Love *LightningIdle Mar 31, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
I didn't notice the tense change, actually; I thought it was handled very smoothly. Excellent work, nice and dark! :D
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~IyraEMM Apr 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, thanks so very much :nod:
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~xXRisingDawnXx Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
who is this guy?
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~IyraEMM Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Whoever you want him to be...?
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~xXRisingDawnXx Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
...
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~Lilithmae1231 Mar 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Whoa, dark. I likes!
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~IyraEMM Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks very much :D
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~Lilithmae1231 Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. :D
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*thesquareroot Jan 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
"clouded white like milk from a poisoned tree" superb
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~IyraEMM Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you! i appreciate you saying so. :nod:
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