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And when the sun sinks, the earth's skin crawls:


I.
I wonder if this awkward creature would notice me the way I notice him.
He's so tragic at his throne
I stare after him longingly.
And yet,
He never realizes that I'm the one
Who forever basks in his brilliant beams.
If only he knew how much brighter he could burn
[with me]
He'd light up the universe.




II.
I heard him speak of thirst, once.
The quenching lust of the stars had run dry.
So that night, I brought along a jar of acid.
(And how it gleamed in his glow).
I handed it to him, wrapped in taffeta ribbons,
screaming
I wish curdling joy
On my gurgling boy


   I love his eyes, now
   Clouded white like milk from a poisoned tree  
   And his throat,
   Swollen and clotted
   And his lips blue as the
   faded heavens
   I try to get him to laugh but
   His body is stuck and
   his bones
   almost fossilized  


And so the poor beast stands paralyzed
While his children rise out of the sea
       enormous wings crackling outwards,
     a new patch of life as
         the soil becomes thick with blood.



III.
When the sun sinks, the earth's skin crawls;
hyper-responsive circuitry
Retrieving, coiling up quickly,
from flowers to the bones of birds-
closing and caving inwards.


A pompous toast to my man in the sky
Drown the last of us but,
You can never give them the thrill
the shriek
the climatic jolt  

that I could.
There wasn't any musical inspiration for this Pfft! I never write in silence.
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I only divided it into parts because it was easier for me to read, and I wanted to be all hoity-toity like those fancy poets.

Does the sudden change of tenses in II. bother you? I'm uncertain.

I kinda had fun with this one.
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and would like to know how I can improve it.
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AvalonYoru Featured By Owner May 22, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is amazing. Congratz on the DD! The sudden change of tense didn't bother me at all! You could improve it by uh... adding more :)
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner May 28, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
adding more! haha i don't know if i'd be able to say anything more with this. i always did want to look at it again someday & fix a few things though. thanks so much for the comment, happy you like it :hug:
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AvalonYoru Featured By Owner May 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
It's stunning, wish I could write like you :)
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:blush:  you're too kind. :pray:
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ThyGod Featured By Owner May 19, 2014  Professional General Artist
I like... want this in a very detailed illuminated page.
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner May 20, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
i'm not sure i understand?

thanks for reading :)
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ThyGod Featured By Owner May 21, 2014  Professional General Artist
You know the book of Kells?  It has illustrations and emphasis on certain letters.  It would look pretty done up and put on a wall.  I should do that and send you the file.
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner May 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
oh wow, that sounds awesome indeed :nod:
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fawnspawn Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014
INTENSE! 
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
thanks ^^;
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